Score: 8

"Seriously disturbing"

submission: Sometimes I Dont 3

date: April 11, 2007

Well... that was unexpected - in a good way. It had a certain natural flow that was quite appealing, despite the dark Firth-esque subject matter at times. Frankly, it's among the more interesting things that I've seen on Newgrounds, and I've seen a fair few.

I think you should keep doing what you're doing, since I believe you've found a good path... just develop your skills some more. Practice drawing, I don't know, or perhaps experiment more with what Flash can do.

Your submissions, so far, have quite low ratings, but I think that they're undervalued. Keep doing what you're doing and keep getting better at it, and eventually (like a light bulb being switched on) one of your works will get acclaim here.

The key is to keep producing stuff, following your own path but not being afraid to experiment and see what works best. Eventually you'll hit something great and find your audience. Until then, I'll be watching your future efforts with interest.

Score: 0

"Seriously..."

submission: 300 - The Collab

date: March 23, 2007

...why? I understand that it was never your intention to make a good flash, but what were you trying to do?

What's the point of releasing a flash that was made to be terrible?

(though the music in the title selection screen was good)

Score: 3

"Didn't like it."

submission: Guide to being review mod

date: January 31, 2007

If you're going to berate review mods, the most effective way to do this would've been to be on topic and to mention specific cases of how they don't do their job well. That could also have given the film some comedic value. As it was, your, uh, "criticism" can theoretically apply to pretty much any Newgrounds employee with no variation. Some job-specific descriptions would've been nice. The film was obviously meant to rely on the humour factor, and this failed for me.

I must admit that I don't much like review mods either, but for a different reason... and... not one which I'll mention here, I think. Too dangerous.

Score: 8

"Very funny."

submission: Evolution !

date: January 4, 2007

Graphics, pacing, and the story really impressed me. This was really quite funny too. However, I do think that it would have been better if there was an actual voice doing the explaining - it seemed a little... empty, somehow. Don't get me wrong, the music and sound effects fit the flash very well, but I didn't like having to read everything; it just didn't work for me. Chang Heavy Industries (google them) does a good job of using timed text in flash; there are no images to distract the viewer and it lets your imagination to the work. Similarly, I don't mind when I have to read in comics, when there is no time limit. But here, something didn't feel right. It was an odd mix of the two worlds; I wanted to look at the pictures, but I had to read the text or fear missing something... I don't think it was the best solution. Of course, text is better than a bad voice actor, so perhaps you have a good reason for using this method. ;)

Despite my critique above, I really did like this piece. Well done!

Score: 0

"Unappealing except to a small few, I believe."

submission: Pootytang Adventures #030

date: December 20, 2006

The flash consists of Wade Fulp's head pasted on top of Batman's body, the flashing words "Wade is the God Damned Batman" and "I luv u Waid <3", a picture of Batman and Robin kissing, and a Batmobile shaking from side to side. It is on an infinite loop and consists of just a couple of frames.

I didn't like it because I believe that it did not have much substance to it. More than anything else, it is an inside joke that required little effort to make compared to the majority of flashes on Newgrounds, and I seriously doubt that the humour translates well outside of a relatively small clique. As such, the submission is not really made for the wider Newgrounds audience, and because I am not a part of the intended group I am giving it the score that I feel it is worth.

In the future, I would recommend the creation of flashes which can be appreciated by a general audience. Some suggestions would be to improve your graphics, put some sound in, add length, and substantiate your thoughts to a greater extent.

Score: 6

"Not bad..."

submission: An Awesome Halloween

date: December 15, 2006

Well, I'm giving this a slightly higher score than the "MGS" submission, largely because there were actually some places where this made me laugh (particularly the violence trifecta). It was a pretty decent halloween flash, on the whole, and I can say that I enjoyed watching it.

There were some things that I thought could've been done better, though. The graphics weren't great, but admittedly they aren't really that important in a humour flash like this (though if they were better they might've risen my score a bit). More serious was that the "nerdy" character was an unrealistic stereotype. Now, I don't mind stereotypes if they're spread around equally... but I got the distinct sense here that the other two guys were meant to be "normal" - and since they were voices by more normal-sounding voices, the implication was that you're "normal" as well. If you're going to make your characters stereotypes, spread it around.

It's bad form to make fun of a character type who's different from you in such an obvious way and not do the same thing to the characters who're like yourself. Make fun of yourself, too, not just of people who you think are silly. Try, anyway - it will make your humour more balanced and also funnier.

As for other criticisms... well, some of the jokes just fell flat to me or I thought could've been done better. I can't really make any suggestions for that though - other than to keep writing. You'll get funnier the more you practice at it.

And that's my review. :p

By the way, I must commend you for responding so well even to your critics in the MGS reviews. Not many artists have the restraint.

Score: 8

"similar"

submission: Russian Mafia on Mars

date: December 2, 2006

Thematically, this seems to be fairly similar to your previous submitted flash, "Bankomat". There's the same idea here about the old bastards being replaced by the new ones, who in a short time get just as power-hungry and are once again destroyed. The two animations are different in many ways, but the themes are almost exactly the same (they're just portrayed differently).

I think that this is a weaker film than "Bankomat", largely because "Bankomat" was much easier to understand. It looks like this one confused nearly all of the reviewers. Other than that, the graphics and style were of the usual high quality, and I liked the music too. The more I watch this film, the more I like it.

By the way, you're a kol-belov fan, you should go and see "Voyeur School", his recent film which was too big to submit to Newgrounds (over 30mb). Search for it on google.

Score: 8

"Awesome!"

submission: Little Kim Jong-il

date: November 22, 2006

That was really great for the most part. I think you nailed the voices perfectly, and it was really funny (that part with the horse was the funniest thing I've seen in a while... totally out of left field!).

The dong joke DID outstay its welcome (there usually some joke or other in your flashes that stays too long) but in general the flash was very well-paced.

The graphics were a bit simple, but they were effective. If you want to improve them, you could add a bit of shading perhaps.

Score: 5

"shows promise"

submission: bizerk VS sinco

date: November 14, 2006

I think you have the potential to make some really cool stuff - this was simply a bit rough, though. Your figures are drawn rather loosely (the arms/legs are way too long sometimes) and it's not always clear what's going on.

On the bright side, you have some pretty awesome special effects there. You just need to practice a bit more - go watch some of the masterpieces of stickfights on Newgrounds like "Sloppy Fight 2" and see how they did things.

Score: 6

"I can see that you tried"

submission: Error: Entire Series

date: November 8, 2006

...and quite honestly it's fun to watch at times. But why did you break up the action by forcing the viewer to constantly click on dialogue boxes? It was annoying - you should just set aside a few seconds for the text boxes next time. So what if some people read slow? It's a slight inconvenience for a few weighed against a big inconvenience for the majority. I'd much rather that the text boxes went by faster than I could read them than me being forced to click those arrows all the time.

The other thing this flash is missing is zooms and camera movement. Well, it's not necessary of course, but it could've been nice.

This could be much better, but I'm being nice and giving a "6" seeing as how you did do some cool things in there - this is better than most stuff on Newgrounds, so it probably deserves above a "5".

So yes. Keep improving.